Pluto The Planet

After a long orbit around the sun, Pluto the Planet goes to visit his neighbor Neptune.

When Pluto arrived at Neptune’s house, he had a bunch of older friends over from school.

As soon as Pluto gets to the room and sits down on the bed all of Neptune’s friends roll their eyes.

“Hey guys!” Said Pluto.

“Aren’t you a little small to be playing these video games?” Snickered Saturn.

“Yeah, who invited him??” Asked Mars.

Neptune takes Pluto to the side to talk.

“Listen Pluto… I think you should go home” Muttered Neptune.

“I don’t understand, I come over to play these games all the time” Pled Pluto.

“Yeah but my friends don’t really like dwarf planets...sorry” Confessed Neptune.

“Oh… okay” Pluto said quietly as he headed home.

In the distance, he spotted something. He decided to go check it out.

When Pluto got closer, he realized it wasn’t a something, but a someone.

“Hi, I’m Pluto” he greeted.

“Hey, I’m Eris, a dwarf planet” He claimed.

“Woah! I am too” Declared Pluto.

“Want to come hang out with my friends and I?’’ Insisted Eris.

“Sure! I’d love to” Decided Pluto.

From that day on Pluto hung out with his new friends. They accepted him for who he was.
Pluto couldn’t be happier with his new friends.

Tips on Writing Children Stories

Information I found particularly helpful is the plot.  I wasn't aware of how important plot was to a children's story.  But, it announces the arrival of the main character and the conflict being faced.  Information that was similar to my previous post when I analyzed three children's stories was the plot introducing the main character to the audience.  The main character is very  important to the theme and plot of the story.  some information I found helpful in the article "Writing Good Dialogue" was to make your dialogue polite and respectful.  You should remember you are writing a children's story and they will be following what they read, so you want to teach them right from wrong.  An example is asking how someone is when they say "Hi".
 Something I think should be part of the grading rubric is if the dialogue creates a clear plot and theme for the story that children can understand.  Also, the message is easy and clear to understand.

Analyzing Children Stories

Buzzy Bee's Picnic
The main character of this children's story is a bee.  This character is non-human.  Buzzy Bee is extremely polite, and loves food very much.  There is not much dialogue in this children's story.  However, the dialogue that it does have helps explain the plot and theme of the story.  It's dialogue sets rules that all kids should follow.  The conflict in this story is the bee eats too much and gets really big.  This is a problem the children can relate to because it teaches them if they eat too much of one thing such as candy, they can get bloated and have a sick stomach.  The conflict if resolved by his friends helping him out of the pot.  The message of this story is be polite and helpful to your friends.  Also, not to eat too much junk food because you will get sick.  I think this is a good book for children because there are more pictures than words.

Fruit Salad
The main character in this story is an apple.  The character is non-human.  The apple is a deep red but starts to develop spotting and bruises because of his age.  There is a lot of dialogue in this children's story.  The dialogue in this story is mainly about all the fruit, and what they want to do with their lives.  This dialogue helps explain the theme by portraying the apple's feelings and issues.  The conflict in this story is the apple not knowing what he wants to do with his life and feeling like his life has no purpose.  Children can't really relate to the deeper meaning because they are all just kids and don't know what to do with their lives either.  The conflict is resolved by all the fruit going to a compost and being together.  The final message in this story is to always be there for your friends and help them through the hard times.

The Wiener Dog Magnet
The main character in this story is a monkey named Kiki Marie.  This character in non-human.  Kiki Marie is orange and has big popping eyes and a cute bow.  She is hard working and very smart.  There is a lot of dialogue in this story.  The dialogue explains Kiki's issue and how it is resolved by her fast thinking.  The conflict in the story is all the wiener dogs are sticking to Kiki's wiener dog magnet and two alligators were stuck on a rock in the middle of the rapids.  The conflict is resolved by Kiki using her wiener dogs as a bridge to get the alligators across safely.  There is really no way for kids to relate to this story.  The final message in the story is to help others no matter what.

These three stories are similar in many different ways.  They all have meanings that are easy for kids to understand.  Also, it teaches children many life lessons in many different and fun ways.  These stories are different because they all have many different lessons and things the kids should do.  I think these stories are appealing to children because they have lots of pictures and funny dialogue.  An example would be in Buzzy Bee's Picnic the bee gets so big because he overeats.

Jaw Dropping Makeup

Creating the perfect smokey eye is a stressful and difficult task. You can do a smokey eye with many different palettes, and can wear it with any outfit or to any occasion. The smokey eye can be used with many different shades of the same colors. Think you’ll look over done with a smokey eye? Many people will want you to teach them this easy and jaw dropping makeup.

Step 1

First, you need to pick any type of eye shadow palette that suits you. You could go with the natural smokey eye which is a bunch of different brown eye shadows. A good choice I would recommend would be the Naked 2 palette if you’re going for the subtle smokey eye.



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Step 2

Then, you start off by using the lightest color in the palette which is “Foxy” to highlight under your brow and the inside corner of your eye. This will add the highlight effect as it is your lightest shade.



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Step 3

After that, you take your medium eye shadow which in this case would be “Verve” and apply it to your whole eyelid. Sweep the color evenly over all the space that “Foxy” did not cover.



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Step 4

Next, begin adding one of your deep shades in the palette, “Pistol”. You continue by dabbing this shade at the middle of your eyelid to darken it up.



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Step 5

Then, you begin using some dark brown colors such as “Busting” and “Blackout”. You need to start at the outer lid and brush in with the dark shades. This creates a ombré effect that doubles as a smokey eye.



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Step 6

For your final step you grab your blending brush and start from the outer lid and blend all the brown shades together to create a finished look. Lastly, you take your lightest shade again (Foxy) and touch up your previous spots to create a highlighted look.



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How to Apply Contour Makeup

For an "How to Article" I picked "How to Apply Contour Makeup". The reason I picked this How to Article is because I enjoy doing makeup.  This article was very well done and was explained  very well.  To have a good how to article you need to follow certain steps.  First, you need good instructions.  Viewers need to be able to follow directions that are clear and to the point.  Another thing you need to have in order for your article to be successful is to have a good description.  The viewers should have very clear idea of what to do and how to do it.  Something else that would be helpful to your how to article would be a catchy title.  You need something that will catch peoples attention and make them pick your article over other peoples.  The how to article I picked had all of theses characteristics, but it could have used a more creative title.

• There are no more than three grammatical or spelling errors in the article. 5/5
• The article has a catchy headline that makes you want to read it. 4/5
• The article has a purpose, explaining benefits to the reader.4/5
• The steps in the article are clear and easy to understand.5/5

Something I think the rubric is missing is a catchy title to catch the viewers attention.